The floor is dirty. Not just dirty, but
Unclean. The baby crawls across it, pull
-ing Deuteronomy with his uncut
Inflection. What provision keeps him full,
This Waste Land child, this Gunslinger, this son
Of dust and grey linoleum? Why mother,
Your boy was birthed eight erstwhile days - he's spun
All up about it - past, yes past, another
Inflected entrepôt to scrawl your verse
Across: the seventh day, he slackened off,
Watched Israel on the weekend, mouthed a curse
And sucked his floor-smeared fingers. Then she'll cough,
Not quite embarrassed - Yeah, the kitty litters
Need changed. We're post-iconoclasts, not quitters.
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Five days off. Gunslinger and another long poem arrived in the mail yesterday. I started reading the Dorn one first and that inspired and impacted this. I'm meanwhile contemplating the intent of this blog, and whether I hope to publish anything in it. If I do, I assuredly need to make this a private blog for workshop purposes, since publishers won't like stuff that's been published elsewhere, even on a blog read by three people. I could make it invitation-only and let those three people read it. I dunno. Something to contemplate. Anyway, here's to reading more Dorn and being inspired to write more tomorrow, or even today!
Dorn....Gunslinger....La, you make me almost curse my ignorance, or maybe my laziness in not immediately relieving my ignorance.
Your professed distaste for my "religious" sonnets makes me wonder anymore whether it is not exactly my displeasure with other folk's effusions in such veins, for here and elsewhere you are just as religious, only mayhap more aloof? Ah, that is where it becomes desirable.
You closed the sonnet with quotes and that is why the italics? La, whet the appetite, eh?
Now that was an almost wildly interesting way to deal with using what might have been a feminine ending and I dunno about it. Crazy. Can we really do that? Hahaha.
If you make it invitation only, please dinna forgit little me. tanks.
While I definitely have my own interpretations for the "mother" and baby, what are yours? She can only be the whore of christianity, Bablyon,the "..Jerusalem that now is and is in bondage with her children." sez I.
And "baby" is....? The product of the modern gospel and society? La, your work begins to look more and more linked together. Hmm. Whose doesn't?
Cool with the allusions and metaphors, imagery. I like it very well, fascinated.
I like the imagery and reference, but I am left to wonder its meaning. I am not quite grasping the connection and comparison to Isreal.
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