The similarity; behind the fact
Of robot life - their solitude within
Their mass - a delicate and inexact
Communion can be heard. The one who'd been
Termed QED 1618 oh 3
Computes no more; though terminated, he's
Alive, and looks with human eyes on he
Who saved him from perdition. Through unease,
The modern man smiles back, and QED,
Now Kilroy, comprehends. Nearby, the core
Ignites; Metropolis, wise to the free
Device, locks down, while Kilroy, with a roar,
Redesignates. As twenty bulkheads burst,
His handle intersects the twenty-first.
4 comments:
It's 2 AM, so it should be pretty obvious that this one was difficult. From midway through line 10 onward, it was rewritten several times 'til I got to this. Worse still, I just noticed after posting it that one of the lines had twelve syllables, and struggled to correct that. Then it made sense for the name to be Kilroy, which meant renaming the previous one, which took some work. Two more to go tomorrow.
Wowers! 2AM and still pressing ahead in this marvelous unlocking of modern mankind and society.
"Kilroy was here" and the bulkheads characteristically...burst...entering the new century redesigned?
Who saved him from inhumanity to enter the 21st? I give up. Who's not sneering at my stupid responses by now? Methinks this seems all too related to your Scott Walker/30 Century Man tribute.
That aside, this is delightfully awesome.
Redesigned and redesignated. In these final lines, I go back to the implied power of sonics and song from the first few sonnets, and allow Kilroy to speak his name - his handle - to penetrate the defenses the core. His auto-announcement, Gabriel unto himself, is sufficient to accomplish miracles.
It was haunting, eerily chilling to reread this, understanding more finally and seeing Metropolis and yet redesignated Kilroy operate.
Gabriel's name did not enter the crown but he was the Milton(?) figure working in the background? Where does the idea of such supernatural power elsewise come into play? Very interesting.
Thanks again for the explanations1
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