His handle intersects the twenty first-
Born modern men Metropolis created:
In ternary design, the grid reversed
Old man's descent, 'til 'QED' awaited,
A seventh android son assembled on
A day of rest. Now shorn of rigid gears,
Metropolis-like, Kilroy tastes the dawn.
Reborn with human eyes and human ears,
He shatters his creator with a word.
There is no man behind the glass, nor will
Beyond the screen. Within the core, a third
Creator could emerge, and Kilroy, still
Restarting, hears the call to join the first
And second; centuries' half-rhymes, at worst.
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This one was satisfying to write. Prior to writing it, I reread the entire sequence, and found myself increasingly less fond of the first sonnet in it. This one and the one prior required modifying the crown sonnet too, which is technically a cheat, but whatever. One more to go, plus the crown, will give me twenty-nine sonnets posted in December (although technically many of these are paying back my November debt.) I could have one for every day of December if I do two more. How's that for a goal?
For your last remark, I see your December archives register that satisfying fact of "31." Sweet. Maybe begin the new year with just every day a sonnet as opposed to the weight of a debt overhanging?
You have a growing distaste for the first sonnet? It was my favourite.
This ends on an interesting note....Kilroy joins the modern century an improved version of his predecessors, finally human instead of so robotic and previously engineered, slaughtering the mechanism to emerge in flesh. Hmm. And yet it is only a case of half-rhymes? Social optimists are interesting.
Did you intentionally alter "Kilroy" to "Killroy"? What is the significance? The uninitiated is half bewildered.
The originators destroyed, in the marvelous new entity a third will emerge? Fascinating. Intriguing. Pray, explain further?
I am amused that the 7th android "son" is birthed on the 7th day...of rest. And we improved on Adam's fall? Curiouser and curiouser.
Superb imagery and fascinating unfolding drama.
Satisfying at 31 perhaps, but only 30 sonnets that month. The 31st was the crown itself, which seems to only count because of the creativity of its presentation. And so I don't count it. It's a new year though, so we'll see, as you suggested, what happens. :)
The first one just seems so out-of-sync with the rest, so I am not sure it fits anymore.
Regarding half-rhymes, here Kilroy (the final version of a series of android ancestors) is tempted to not return but rather to stay as the new Metrpolis, as the third creator. It's lightly implied that he, the seventh son created sinfully on the seventh day, is able to use the sin of his creation to bring down his creator. The seventh day is also noting that God was satisfied to make man early, but man (and his machines) went a day further. And "seventh android son" is a reference to the 21st version, 7 being 21 in trinary. For added fun, go back and look at the 7th sonnet of this crown.
I struggled throughout to not typo Kilroy as Killroy. Thanks for the catch. It's fixed.
If you can succeed at hitting your intended mark for now, or else restarting from here, life will be easier. Somehow, methinks time proves the former is the only possibility.
The "god" who is here credited with creating man turns out to be a bit less wise than his creation? La, there is so much theology that is twisted out of order in such suggestions, so far as I presently see.
I briefly reexamined the 7th "Modern Men" and missed the connection, excepting that they failed to exit the crust but returned/descended into hell, I guess.
Very interesting.
Dandy, I was uncertain whether you had another intent in the seeming typo.
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