And second-centuries, half-rhymes, at worst,
To heartbeats, drum inside his android brain,
Their epochal vibrations interspersed
With echoes of creation. Kilroy's reign
Below the neutral-network grid begins
And ends; he heeds instead the neon light
And excavates the core. The android sins
Metropolis commanded die outright;
The modern men are people once again.
They stand around the ruins of the dome
Where, from the wreckage, Kilroy climbs. The men,
A silent, blinking sea of android chrome,
From Darien, surmise what he became
With circuitry throughout his plastic frame.
3 comments:
La, we had to bring in that favourite sonnet of Keats "Chapman on Homer"?! A brave new world with a half-human, half-mechanical creature?
What is the significance of only half-rhymes? This is a fantastic study and delightful.
"Epochal vibrations/echoes of creation"...lovely.
The neon light now guides emerging man...hmm, what does that signify?
I loved L11's "climbs" for while altogether apt, yet also it sang in the mind with L10's "dome" or else what was it? Something was so beautiful when I read that line.
QED-161803/Kilroy saved mankind from being merely mechanisms, although only plastic and circuitry run throughout his frame, what is this new saviour, seriously?
Awesome with excellent imagery. Quite a beautiful crown, well worth honour for the effort your Christmas vacation produced. I'm impressed and delighted, while still half-intrigued.
Oh, we did indeed have to bring in that sonnet! Here, I use "half-rhymed" to match the second-centuries of time during which Kilroy is tempted to human heartbeats. It's an effort to change that line a bit between this sonnet and the last one. I am glad you liked epochal vibrations/echoes of creation; it was fun to write and I was pleased with the way it fit the page. It was a struggle to fit the words into that space. But here, Kilroy faces his temptation and rejects it, and returns to the world at the conclusion of his hero's journey.
With neon lights, I wanted to turn back to the crown itself, to remind the reader of the scene where QED first contemplated something different, and to make the return of the neon lights in the crown not so surprising.
Ah, aye. You used Keats' sonnet excellently here too! I like that very well.
Oh...let's see. We have devised a "new and improved" Adam? La, superb! You have entered (in my opinion anyway) the ranks of Superman and Spiderman's creators: a saviour of our own devising, in ignorance of the fact that God alone is the only saviour, there is none other. And yet that upholds my initial suggestion of the present gospel's trend.
I really enjoyed and appreciated your explanations. Thank you so much for taking the seemingly silly time to do so.
Awesome!
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